Review for Redemption

The Redemption of Mr. Sturlubokwas reviewed at BigAl’s Books and Pal’s today…

Here’s the complete review:

Mr. Sturlubok is very proud of his elevation to acting assistant principal at an elementary school. He is prepared for every eventuality except the one that occurs. What should Mr. Sturlubok do? You decide!
It’s very difficult to give just one appraisal of this book because there are so many options. Since it’s literally a choose-your-own-story book, there are a myriad ways that the story can play out. Some are funny, some less so, others not at all.  I tested about 6 different variations for this review.  There were a couple that really didn’t seem to go anywhere with the story; there was one that got a little ‘naughty’; and there was one that ended up being a fairly substantial, although still ‘fluffy’ story. This is most certainly not a book that you sit down and read straight through, nor will it be the same for any two people.  There are multiple options throughout the book to choose (and change) the storyline, which makes for a fun diversion, but definitely a non-traditional read for an adult.
The characters are relatively two-dimensional – most likely due to the constraints of the choose-your-own format – and almost come across as stereotypes.  I personally didn’t find that a bad thing in this particular case, though I wouldn’t like it in a more traditional novel format.  The whole point of this book is to have fun with the story, rather than to engage with the characters or the plot.
Format Issues:
None noted. The links to select the next part of the story work well, although they tended to be on a separate page – one section would just end, with Mr. Sturlubok needing to make a decision on how to proceed, but the links to actually select his decision and move the story forward would be on the next page, which was a little confusing at first.  Also, there are apparently random words and phrases underlined throughout the story.  I found those annoying and distracting until it dawned on me that they were links too – then I started checking those out, and discovered that they led to humorous little ‘asides’ by the authors or to a tidbit of additional information.
Rating: **** Four stars

Assessment for Sturlubok: Fully Meeting Expectations

A review posted today for The Redmption of Mr. Sturlubok on E-Finds:

The Redemption of Mr. Sturlubok is the second choose your own adventure ebook by Kerkhoven and Pitts; I previously reviewed their other title and found it fun, but a bit on the farcical side. This new entry is more of the same, but the farce is a little more credible this time. Mr. Sturlobok is a school principal, and his position of authority relative to the janitor of the previous book is more credible a comic hero-slash-villain. I also work in a school myself, so I found some of the school-related details resonating with me more than they might have otherwise.

A book like this is not read for its literary merit. The authors are witty and the book is a lot of fun, but this is definitely a book-toy, and if you understand that going in, you’ll definitely enjoy it more. It’s like those people who panned the live-action Scooby Do movies because they tried to evaluate them as serious films instead of the screen candy they were intended to be. If you want a serious film, don’t watch Scooby Do. If you want a serious book, look elsewhere.

An interactive story like this must be a huge amount of work to put together. The authors were careful, and I caught no mistakes. To be careful and to make it fun to boot is no small feat. If you are in the mood for some light, comic book-play, this is the title for you. One complaint: I had to double-check the spelling on the title several times int he process of downloading, reviewing and bookmarking this title. A small complaint, but even so 🙂 4 out of 5 stars.


After what’s been a long wait, at least for me, The Redemption of Mr. Sturlubok is finally released today and it’s being advertised at KindleBoards and Kindle Nation Daily.  Right now there are no reviews, but hopefully some will start trickling in…

In Four Days

So, I’m getting a little excited.  In four days, The Redemption of Mr. Sturlubok  will be officially released.  It’s the first time that I’ve written (well, co-written) a book with the intention of releasing it as an ebook.  It’s the first time that I’ve planned on the publishing date well in advance and have had time to send out review copies and set up advertising.  All in all, this feels very new and exciting.  I’ve been waiting for this moment for several months, and I feel that I’ve done what I can as a unknown author.

In terms of advertising, I have The Redemption… set to the the Kindle Nation Daily daily sponsor on April 30th, I have a banner ad scheduled at KindleBoards for both the 30th as well as May 4th, and I’ve been experimenting with some facebook ads (to some limited success) and have a couple of facebook ads scheduled to start running from Saturday onwards.   So, with all these things at once, I won’t know what is affecting what, but hopefully things will move fast.

And, again, to anyone who used the Smashwords coupon for the free complete edition, it would be great if you could leave a review at the Amazon site at anytime.

One Week

The Redemption of Mr. Sturlubok is officially being released in one week, but the Amazon page is set up and ready.  It used to take several days for a book to go live from being published, but this time it only took a matter of hours.  To anyone who used the Smashwords coupon (which has expired), you can download the final version from Smashwords at your leisure…


Well, I clicked publish for The Redemption of Mr. Sturlubok today.  This way, if for some reason there is something wrong with it, or something about it doesn’t pass Amazon’s review screening, I still have time to make changes before the release and advertisements on the 30th.

It’s a strangely thrilling and yet anti-climactic thing, just clicking a button to publish.  Still feels a little momentous to me.

Anyone who used the Smashwords coupon earlier, you can download the updated version on the Smashwords site, which is free (I believe) of any hyperlink errors, as well as with a few changes to the manuscript.

And last night, for the first time in several months, I sat down and wrote a few pages for something that had nothing to do with Sturlubok.  It was kind of liberating, actually…


To anyone who used the Smashwords coupon for the preview edition of The Redemption of Mr. Sturlubok, I’ve found a couple of non-functioning links, which have now been resolved.  If you wish, you can download the updated version from Smashwords (I just uploaded the new document, and it should be available by Sunday, April 17th).

Speaking of the book, I will be uploading the final version and clicking publish on the Amazon site next Saturday, which will give Amazon a week to set up the book’s page, descriptions, and so on, before it’s official release on April 30th (on which it is the Kindle Nation Daily book of the day, as well as having a Kindleboards banner ad).  So, the title should start appearing on the site by the 26th or so.


So, for the next few weeks, you can download the complete preview edition of The Redemption of Mr. Sturlubok at Smashwords using this coupon code: BF35E .  The link to site is here:

Although not the final version (there is still a tiny bit of polishing being finished up), it’s 98% of the final version.  And in some ways, it’s even more.  The preview editions include ‘cheats’ to 10 different plots, in case you tire of looking for things on your own.  This will not be part of the official release on April 30th.

So, feel free to download the preview copy.  But, I’ll be honest: I’m offering the coupon code on my blog because I’m hoping that anyone who downloads it will be willing to write an honest review for the book on the Amazon site at some point.   I’ll be sending out the same copy to various review blogs that have already reviewed The Adventures of Whatley Tupper in the weekend, and hopefully by the time the book is released, there will be at least one or two reviews ready.   Do you want to help me out?

The Sell…

Mr. Leroy Sturlubok—a high-strung, loose cannon, take-no-prisoners kind of guy—has recently risen to the lofty echelons of society. He’s become a public elementary school vice principal. But when it seems that someone has broken through the defenses of his beloved workplace, a single decision leads to a labyrinthine world of possibilities.

Will he solve the mystery of his predecessor’s sudden (although beneficial) demise? Will he foil a terrorist plot from the afterlife? Will he team up with a telepathic elderly Japanese man who looks strangely similar to Sulu from the original Star Trek? Will he allow Tony Danza to film his new reality television show in his school? Will he find out just who the hell is taking all the damn photocopy paper? Will he return to his native Norway and lead a life fit for the mighty Norse god Odin, himself? Will he start a new life among those rude and wretched Canadians? Or will he learn the insidious secret about his ex-wife’s French fiancé, Andre Cartier? The choice, as always, is up to you: the reader.

With more than 100 choices, 46 different endings, as well as dozens of hyperlinked footnotes, The Redemption of Mr. Sturlubok contains enough twists and surprises to keep even the most hyperactive adult entertained. You won’t be able to help yourself from smiling—like a Kindergarten class during flu season, The Redemption of Mr. Sturlubok is infectious.

A note from the authors:

Rudolf Kerkhoven and Daniel Pitts have more than 20 years of teaching experience between the two of them. The Redemption of Mr. Sturlubok does not in any way reflect anything they have learned or witnessed.